Franck,

Your topic of health and wealth is an interesting and current topic and it is related to course themes and core values. You begin by explaining the importance of this topic; this sets a meaningful tone for the case study. You have an important focus. Make sure you have clear reasons to support your thesis; these exact reasons will become your body paragraph topics. Make sure your thesis takes a clear stance on the issue. Take a side on the issue.

Also think about: Who should lead the charge of take responsibility when it comes to your topic? Lawmakers? Employers? Individuals? Schools? Society at large? The government? All of the above? Who needs to adapt and to what degree?

Your thesis sentence will provide the backbone argument for your case study and will turn into your body paragraphs as you have already begun to do.

You cite substantive sources and control the writing effectively with concise language. You should use transitions such as firstly, secondly, finally etc when talking about your suggestions in the body paragraphs. Please also paraphrase quotes in your own words instead of citing long direct quotes. You do a fairly good job of this.

Also, you talk meaningfully about how this topic related to your core values. You might expand a little bit on this but Well done. But you have begun this.

In this case study, you focused your efforts researching a particular topic area, perhaps as a response to what you found while assessing your core values and in constructing the summary response and quote log. You then conducted more research and synthesized your findings in this case study. You managed to narrow your topic angle/perspective meaningfully here.

Paragraph content organization is crucial for this assignment. You mostly have clear topical controlling statements for each section/paragraph in this case study. You aptly frame more nuanced points within each paragraph/section.

You do a good job of explaining important aspects of your topic and connecting the thesis to your core values. You integrate a sufficient number of sources into the case study which provide sufficient depth of data.

Let your thesis be an arguable statement that directly guides your body paragraphs as I mentioned above. Each part of your thesis should be lead to its own body paragraph. Make sure your thesis is clearly placed at the end of paragraph one. You appear to do this.

A good case study succinctly and clearly supports a thesis with relevant detail, evidence, and connection to core values. Structurally information surrounding the background on the issue, supportive body paragraphs, and a conclusion are put forth here. The reader is clearly engaged to understand why this topic is important to both specific stakeholders and to society at large. help the reader understand why this topic has relevance to society and of helping readers understand why this topic should be investigated further. Simply develop your paragraphs with more specificity and depth.

Create a concluding paragraph that will talk a bit more about the future of this topic and where it might be heading in the next 10-15 years. Generally expand each of your sections a bit. Make sure to cite only with authors last name and date of publication. For example, (Haynes, 2015).